Working Draft No. 12: ??

I did actually give the draft a title when I sent it to Tupelo this morning, but I’ve keep the double question mark of the original draft here.  My little girl has a bit of a boo boo which we have to clean before she goes to bed.  I suppose it’s one of those rites of childhood, learning that the little bit of pain and discomfort now is a lot better than a whole lot more later.  Still it really doesn’t get any easier, as I have to constantly have to tell myself now.  Like every time I go to the dentist.

I spent more time thinking about the title this time than I have with the others and I still don’t like it.  I tried to tighten up the draft a bit and did make it into one large block rather than two strophes as I have it here.  You can find the newer version here.   Let me know what you think.

 

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